P5: Write an Original Article for TV Broadcast
P6: Use Sub-Editing Skills to Finalise Article For Broadcast
First Draft Sub-Edit
Here I have written up an initial draft script for my article. This script includes visual information, scripted speech and dialogue from my interviews. This gives me direction for recording voiceover, as well as direction for what sound and dialogue will go where in the editing process.
Here is the first draft:
Here is the first draft:
Having written my first draft, I wanted feedback to improve it. I took the draft to a peer a few peers and had them read over it and write any corrections or improvements that could be made. Here is the printed script with feedback:
I received a lot of valuable feedback from my peers here. A few key improvements that I can make are changing wording to be more specific and appeal to a more modern audience (e.g adding the word "phones" when referring to music listening, or adding the specific name of the college.)
I also received the feedback to change the "Interviewer" in the script to "VO" as this was planned to be a voiceover.
I also received the feedback to add a conclusion and VO outro to the end of the clip.
I also received the feedback to change the "Interviewer" in the script to "VO" as this was planned to be a voiceover.
I also received the feedback to add a conclusion and VO outro to the end of the clip.
Second Draft Sub-Edit
Utilising the feedback from my peers, I wrote up an improved script and presented this back to my peers for further feedback. Here is this version:
Here I received feedback to add a proper article Headline to add specificity and character to the interview. I have made this change and come up with the headline "Music Magic" for my project.
Video
Here is the final audio-visual article: